Is this better? I did some rearranging in the 2nd paragraph enclosed in brackets, how does it sound? The Semicolon before "and"and the comma after "and" in particular, is that alright?
1). [ "Hello! My name is _______, but you may call me ___ for short! I’m 20-years-old, and I’m a US Citizen. I was born in ______ ____ and raised in a small city called _____ ______ in the state of ________ with my 4 younger brothers. I currently live in ______ ____, ______, with my brothers, our dad and our five cats. ]
2). [ Music is a big part of my life; I grew up listening to rock music such as Metallica, Pixies, and the Ramones which inspired me to become a rock musician. I also love to travel and meet new people; and, as a professional musician, I'm able to tour and meet new people from all over the world!
Now I sing and play guitar professionally in a rock band called ______ with my brothers and travel all over the world with them and our dad as our band manager! ]
3). [ I love studying and learning new languages and learning about different cultures. I’m primarily learning three languages which include Japanese, Argentinian-Spanish, and German, but I also taught myself how to read and write in Chinese, Russian, Korean, Hebrew, Arabic and Greek. My goal, for now, is to become able to speak comfortably and confidently in my primary three languages before diving further into the other languages on my list that I've gotten a head start on. Of course, ultimately, I want to become fluent in each one! ]
4). [ Some of my other interests include reading, health, history, science, religion (and no, I’m not religious), anime, video games, and art." ]