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HI guys!!! please help me to correction the text, thank you so much!
The story about the <The horse whisperer>
Grace is a 13 years old girl, she has a good friend is a horse, his name is pilgrim. They had a seriously hurt in a crash accident. Grace was lost one of her leg, the horse had almost lost his half face. Though, grace’s mum, Annie, she is a very successful woman work in the top fashionable magazine in New York. After the accident, she wants to get her daughter to get better. She also wants to save the horse life. In Annie’s mind, her daughter and the horse’s life are tie in together. She heard of the special skills that Tom Booker has with horses. At first, he said he can’t do anything about the horse because the horse had suffered too much. But Annie does not accept, so she drove with her daughter and the sick horse to the Tom booker’s house which is from New York to Montana.
After grace and her mum stay in Montana for a month, Grace’s father Robert, he is a lawyer, he was come to Montana to visit them for a week, but he didn’t find that Annie and Tom had fall in love already. One more half month later, the horse was better and it was time to leave Montana. But Grace accidently know the affair about her mum and Tom. She was angry and made the all horses were run away from the stable at that night. Tom was died by the horse’s kick when he try to getting all the horses back to stable at after morning.
Annie and Robert had separated when Annie got back to New York.
10 months later, Annie had a baby that she is not sure which man is the father between Tom and her husband Robert.
Does this sound natural?
HI guys!!! please help me to correction the text, thank you so much!
The story about the <The horse whisperer>
Grace is a 13 years old girl, she has a good friend is a horse, his name is pilgrim. They had a seriously hurt in a crash accident. Grace was lost one of her leg, the horse had almost lost his half face. Though, grace’s mum, Annie, she is a very successful woman work in the top fashionable magazine in New York. After the accident, she wants to get her daughter to get better. She also wants to save the horse life. In Annie’s mind, her daughter and the horse’s life are tie in together. She heard of the special skills that Tom Booker has with horses. At first, he said he can’t do anything about the horse because the horse had suffered too much. But Annie does not accept, so she drove with her daughter and the sick horse to the Tom booker’s house which is from New York to Montana.
After grace and her mum stay in Montana for a month, Grace’s father Robert, he is a lawyer, he was come to Montana to visit them for a week, but he didn’t find that Annie and Tom had fall in love already. One more half month later, the horse was better and it was time to leave Montana. But Grace accidently know the affair about her mum and Tom. She was angry and made the all horses were run away from the stable at that night. Tom was died by the horse’s kick when he try to getting all the horses back to stable at after morning.
Annie and Robert had separated when Annie got back to New York.
10 months later, Annie had a baby that she is not sure which man is the father between Tom and her husband Robert.
Does this sound natural?
The story about the <The horse whisperer>
Grace is a 13 years old girl, she has a good friend is a horse, his name is pilgrim. They had a seriously hurt in a crash accident. Grace was lost one of her leg, the horse had almost lost his half face. Though, grace’s mum, Annie, she is a very successful woman work in the top fashionable magazine in New York. After the accident, she wants to get her daughter to get better. She also wants to save the horse life. In Annie’s mind, her daughter and the horse’s life are tie in together. She heard of the special skills that Tom Booker has with horses. At first, he said he can’t do anything about the horse because the horse had suffered too much. But Annie does not accept, so she drove with her daughter and the sick horse to the Tom booker’s house which is from New York to Montana.
After grace and her mum stay in Montana for a month, Grace’s father Robert, he is a lawyer, he was come to Montana to visit them for a week, but he didn’t find that Annie and Tom had fall in love already. One more half month later, the horse was better and it was time to leave Montana. But Grace accidently know the affair about her mum and Tom. She was angry and made the all horses were run away from the stable at that night. Tom was died by the horse’s kick when he try to getting all the horses back to stable at after morning.
Annie and Robert had separated when Annie got back to New York.
10 months later, Annie had a baby that she is not sure which man is the father between Tom and her husband Robert.
Does this sound natural?
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25 Mar 2019
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HI guys!!! please help me correct the text. Thank you so much!
The story about <The Horse Whisperer>
Grace was a 13 year old girl. She had a good friend which is a horse. The horse is a boy and his name is Pilgrim. They were seriously hurt in a car accident. Grace lost one of her legs. The horse had almost lost half of his face. Grace’s mom, Annie, was a very successful woman. She worked as a model for one of the top fashionable magazines in New York. After the accident, she wanted her daughter to get better. She also wanted to save the horse's life. In Annie’s mind, her daughter and the horse’s life are tied in together. She heard of the special skills that Tom Booker had with horses. First, she gave him a call, but he said he couldn't do anything about the horse because the horse was suffering too much. But Annie didn't accept his words, so she drove with her daughter and the sick horse to Tom Booker’s house, which is a couple thousand miles from New York to Montana.
After Grace and her mom stayed in Montana for a month, Grace’s father Robert, who was also a lawyer, came to Montana to visit and planned to stay with them for a week, but he didn’t realize before that Annie and Tom had already fallen in love. Half a month later, the horse was better and it was time to leave Montana. But Grace found out the affair between her mom and Tom. She was angry and made all the horses run away from the stable that night. Tom died by one of the horse’s kick when he tried to get all the horses back to stable the morning after.
Annie and Robert had separated when Annie got back to New York.
10 months later, Annie had a baby in which she didn't know the father of. It was either Tom's or her husband, Robert's.
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I just read a book, and I was trying to use my own language to tell you the story. so please tell me if there anything wrong. I am so appreciate that you help!!!
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HI guys!!! please help me correct the text. Thank you so much!
The story about <The Horse Whisperer>
Grace was a 13 year old girl. She had a good friend which is a horse. The horse is a boy and his name is Pilgrim. They were seriously hurt in a car accident. Grace lost one of her legs. The horse had almost lost half of his face. Grace’s mom, Annie, was a very successful woman. She worked as a model for one of the top fashionable magazines in New York. After the accident, she wanted her daughter to get better. She also wanted to save the horse's life. In Annie’s mind, her daughter and the horse’s life are tied in together. She heard of the special skills that Tom Booker had with horses. First, she gave him a call, but he said he couldn't do anything about the horse because the horse was suffering too much. But Annie didn't accept his words, so she drove with her daughter and the sick horse to Tom Booker’s house, which is a couple thousand miles from New York to Montana.
After Grace and her mom stayed in Montana for a month, Grace’s father Robert, who was also a lawyer, came to Montana to visit and planned to stay with them for a week, but he didn’t realize before that Annie and Tom had already fallen in love. Half a month later, the horse was better and it was time to leave Montana. But Grace found out the affair between her mom and Tom. She was angry and made all the horses run away from the stable that night. Tom died by one of the horse’s kick when he tried to get all the horses back to stable the morning after.
Annie and Robert had separated when Annie got back to New York.
10 months later, Annie had a baby in which she didn't know the father of. It was either Tom's or her husband, Robert's.
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If you need me to explain anything else about this story, I'll be glad to help! Let me know if you still don't understand some things.
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@sinab Thank you soooo much!!! You are a amazing person! I know it's a lot of work to correct my text. Maybe there is one more thing I need your help. what's the different between " Tom was died by one of horse's kick..." and "Tom died by one of horse's kick..." ^ ^
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No it wasn't too much! I would love to help you! The difference is if you add in the "was" the sentence would not be correct because "was" doesn't fit in. It would make more sense if you wrote "Tom was dying after being kicked by one of the horses." (dying instead of died.)
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@sinab It is make sense, I think I got what you say. if I use "was died" seem Tom was died and died, it doesn't make sense. Thank you so much!
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No problem! Yes, you're correct.
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