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20 May 2019
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Yestaday`s Diary :May 19,2019.
I got up at 11:00 am by my friend`s phone call, because I was going to BBQ event with my friends.
I went to BBQ event at 11:30 am immediately.
There are many people, fried noodles, fried potatos, shaved ice and meats.
I enjoyed it.
After enjoyed, I went back home on the way.
But unfortunately the prize lottery was held after I returned, and I was winning the lottery.
The prize was a 3,000 yen gift certificate.
After returning home, I played PS4 game from 3:00 pm to 6:00 pm.
Then I made ginger fried pork for dinner.
After dinner, I studyed chemistry from 7:00 pm to 9:00 pm.
After studyed, I went to sleep.
PLEASE PUT CORRECTIONS IN CAPITAL LETTERS. Does this sound natural?
Yestaday`s Diary :May 19,2019.
I got up at 11:00 am by my friend`s phone call, because I was going to BBQ event with my friends.
I went to BBQ event at 11:30 am immediately.
There are many people, fried noodles, fried potatos, shaved ice and meats.
I enjoyed it.
After enjoyed, I went back home on the way.
But unfortunately the prize lottery was held after I returned, and I was winning the lottery.
The prize was a 3,000 yen gift certificate.
After returning home, I played PS4 game from 3:00 pm to 6:00 pm.
Then I made ginger fried pork for dinner.
After dinner, I studyed chemistry from 7:00 pm to 9:00 pm.
After studyed, I went to sleep.
PLEASE PUT CORRECTIONS IN CAPITAL LETTERS. Does this sound natural?
I got up at 11:00 am by my friend`s phone call, because I was going to BBQ event with my friends.
I went to BBQ event at 11:30 am immediately.
There are many people, fried noodles, fried potatos, shaved ice and meats.
I enjoyed it.
After enjoyed, I went back home on the way.
But unfortunately the prize lottery was held after I returned, and I was winning the lottery.
The prize was a 3,000 yen gift certificate.
After returning home, I played PS4 game from 3:00 pm to 6:00 pm.
Then I made ginger fried pork for dinner.
After dinner, I studyed chemistry from 7:00 pm to 9:00 pm.
After studyed, I went to sleep.
PLEASE PUT CORRECTIONS IN CAPITAL LETTERS. Does this sound natural?
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21 May 2019
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A little unnatural
YESTERDAY’S Diary: May 19, 2019.
I WOKEN UP at 11:00 am by my friend`s phone call, because I was going to BBQ event with my friends.
I went to THE BBQ event at 11:30 am.
There WERE SO many people, fried noodles, fried POTATOES, shaved ice and meats.
I enjoyed it.
After I went back home on the way.
Unfortunately the prize lottery was held after I HAD returned, and I was winning the lottery.
The prize was a 3,000 yen gift certificate.
After returning home, I played PS4 game from 3:00 pm to 6:00 pm.
Then I made ginger fried pork for dinner.
After dinner, I STUDIED chemistry from 7:00 pm to 9:00 pm.
After STUDIED, I went to sleep.
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- English (US)
A little unnatural
YESTERDAY’S Diary: May 19, 2019.
I WOKEN UP at 11:00 am by my friend`s phone call, because I was going to BBQ event with my friends.
I went to THE BBQ event at 11:30 am.
There WERE SO many people, fried noodles, fried POTATOES, shaved ice and meats.
I enjoyed it.
After I went back home on the way.
Unfortunately the prize lottery was held after I HAD returned, and I was winning the lottery.
The prize was a 3,000 yen gift certificate.
After returning home, I played PS4 game from 3:00 pm to 6:00 pm.
Then I made ginger fried pork for dinner.
After dinner, I STUDIED chemistry from 7:00 pm to 9:00 pm.
After STUDIED, I went to sleep.
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I am very happy with the polite explanation. Thank you for your answer.
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