First, I would like to study International Relations (IR) at a foreign university. I got interested in IR when studying politics at Keio University. The field of IR connects with law, economics, geopolitics, history and sociology, so when I study and tackle some IR problems, I need take these fields into consideration and examine the problems from various points of view. I think I can apply this way of thinking for the other fields, such as some domestic problems. It is true that I can study the IR at a university in Japan. I took classes about the Western diplomacy history and regional studies & comparative politics at Keio university.

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First,*[i don't know if this is necessary] I would like to study International Relations (IR) at a foreign university. I got interested in IR when studying politics at Keio University. The field of IR connects *law, economics, geopolitics, history and sociology, so when I study and tackle some IR problems, I need take these fields into consideration and examine the problems from various points of view. I think I can apply this way of thinking to* *other fields, such as some domestic problems. It is true that I can study * IR at a university in Japan. I took classes about the history* of Western diplomacy and regional studies & comparative politics at Keio university.
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