I stopped by the Izakaya after work overtime with my colleague. He knows how hard this job is because he is my subordinate who I trained, but he was exhausted of this overtime and was pale. So I treated him a healthy smoothie. On the other hand, having not slept as many as 4 days, I drank some fruit juice and fell asleep while complaining about this overtime. He complained that he couldn't sleep only 3 hours yesterday. The atmosphere of Izakaya was good and the darts were displayed. Does this sound natural?
- English (US)
A little unnatural
I stopped by the Izakaya after workworking overtime with my colleague.
I stopped by the Izakaya after workworking overtime with my colleague.
He knows how hard this job is, because he is my subordinate who I trained, but he was exhausted ofby this overtime and was pale.
He knows how hard this job is, because he is my subordinate who I trained, but he was exhausted ofby this overtime and was pale.
So I treated him to a healthy smoothie.
So I treated him to a healthy smoothie.
On themy otherpart hand, having not slept In as many as 4four days, I drank some fruit juice and fell asleep while complaining about this overtime.
On themy otherpart hand, having not slept In as many as 4four days, I drank some fruit juice and fell asleep while complaining about this overtime.
He complained that he couldn'tslept sleep only 3three hours yesterday.
He complained that he couldn'tslept sleep only 3three hours yesterday.
The atmosphere of Izakaya was goodlively, with and the darts were displayed.
The atmosphere of Izakaya was goodlively, with and the darts were displayed.
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- English (US)
A little unnatural
I stopped by the Izakaya after workworking overtime with my colleague.
I stopped by the Izakaya after workworking overtime with my colleague.
He knows how hard this job is, because he is my subordinate who I trained, but he was exhausted ofby this overtime and was pale.
He knows how hard this job is, because he is my subordinate who I trained, but he was exhausted ofby this overtime and was pale.
So I treated him to a healthy smoothie.
So I treated him to a healthy smoothie.
On themy otherpart hand, having not slept In as many as 4four days, I drank some fruit juice and fell asleep while complaining about this overtime.
On themy otherpart hand, having not slept In as many as 4four days, I drank some fruit juice and fell asleep while complaining about this overtime.
He complained that he couldn'tslept sleep only 3three hours yesterday.
He complained that he couldn'tslept sleep only 3three hours yesterday.
The atmosphere of Izakaya was goodlively, with and the darts were displayed.
The atmosphere of Izakaya was goodlively, with and the darts were displayed.
“On the other hand” is used only for contrasts, and is usually preceded by a contrasting phrase - which you don’t have here. As an example: on one hand I wanted to go to the party, on the other hand I had work I needed to get done that needed my time.
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@Dcarl1 Thanks for the help.
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