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20 May
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Does the following paragraph sound natural to your ears? Please revise it and give me your opinion. Thanks in advance! Once you experienced something in your childhood, the memory would be carried on for the rest of your life and it would affect your behaviour immensely. I didn’t really experience famine in my childhood. Nevertheless, the food was precious in my memory. Wasting food was an off-limit. I detest wasting food. Once the food starts perishing, I salvage the remaining part—although others might consider the whole stuff is not edible anymore. Like tomatoes, if the black spot formed, I cut the black spot and use the rest. It’s not about the money. It’s an attitude towards food. Unless the evidence based data support the view that eating this kind of tomato has detrimental effects to your health, I’d continue to eat them.
Does the following paragraph sound natural to your ears? Please revise it and give me your opinion. Thanks in advance! Once you experienced something in your childhood, the memory would be carried on for the rest of your life and it would affect your behaviour immensely. I didn’t really experience famine in my childhood. Nevertheless, the food was precious in my memory. Wasting food was an off-limit. I detest wasting food. Once the food starts perishing, I salvage the remaining part—although others might consider the whole stuff is not edible anymore. Like tomatoes, if the black spot formed, I cut the black spot and use the rest. It’s not about the money. It’s an attitude towards food. Unless the evidence based data support the view that eating this kind of tomato has detrimental effects to your health, I’d continue to eat them.
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Does the following paragraph sound natural to your ears? Please revise it and give me your opinion. Thanks in advance!
Once you experienced something in your childhood, the memory will be carried on for the rest of your life and it may always affect your behaviour.
I didn’t really experience famine in my childhood. Nevertheless, food was precious in my memory.
Wasting food was off-limits and to this day, I hate to see wasted food. Once the food starts turning bad, I salvage the remaining part—although others might consider the whole stuff to be inedible and throw it away.
An example is tomatoes, if a black spot forms, I cut it away and use the rest.
It’s not about the money. It’s an attitude towards food. Unless there is evidence based data that shows a detrimental effect to my health, I will continue to eat them.
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Consider simplifying the phrase “there is evidence based data”.
Unless there is data that shows eating salvaged tomatoes …
Unless there is proof that shows salvaged tomatoes…
- Simplified Chinese (China) Near fluent
Many thanks! Constructive opinion. I really appreciate it!
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You did really well on the paragraph. Minor editing and using more idiomatic language made it flow. (In my opinion). What is this for?
- Simplified Chinese (China) Near fluent
Thanks a lot! Part of my memoir... Just kidding.. I consider writer is a very good occupation. I'm working on it NOW... and thanks for your help!
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I consider writing to be a very good occupation as well.
Your English is much better than my Chinese.
- Simplified Chinese (China) Near fluent
Writer is a person who build the castle in the air and then starts to collect the rent for the rest of his life... He pays only his income tax...and he doesn't have to pay the property tax annually for the castle he built! And I speak Japanese a little 'cause I had a Japanese gf before...
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Nicely said! My bf daughter is stuck in Shanghai. Coming back to US soon!
- Simplified Chinese (China) Near fluent
I guess the air ticket would cost her an arm and a leg... maybe two arms these days!
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Thanks! If you have any questions regarding the culture of Asian countries in the future, feel free to talk to me... Have a good one!

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