All of it's good besides this part, where there should be a comma "...it may strike them into a mood of bewilderment and wonder. Much like it struck the feeling into me many years ago. " should be "it may strike them into a mood of bewilderment and wonder, much like it struck the feeling into me many years ago."
@jinkisaragi Try it like this: read it out loud twice. Once making a short pause (for the comma), and the other with a longer one (for the stop). To me, it sounds better in the later case. It enhances the poetic effect, giving some sense of space and wonder.
@NadiuskaDJL "I been working on" is improper English. Many people speak that way, but it's wrong and sounds a little.. uneducated? You can talk that way, but "I have been" or "I've been" is the correct way to say it.