- Japanese
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English (US)
I would like you to correct my sentences about ice cream.
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This ice cream is one inch diameter ball.
The ice ball is made of two layers.
Inside of the juicy melty soft ice is covered with thin hard ice.
It includes 80% fruit juice.
12 pieces of the ice balls are in the pouch.
The manufacturer introduces how to eat the ice.
Not only simply eating it but also putting it into a cup of soda or milk. Does this sound natural?
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This ice cream is one inch diameter ball.
The ice ball is made of two layers.
Inside of the juicy melty soft ice is covered with thin hard ice.
It includes 80% fruit juice.
12 pieces of the ice balls are in the pouch.
The manufacturer introduces how to eat the ice.
Not only simply eating it but also putting it into a cup of soda or milk. Does this sound natural?
- English (US)
Unnatural
The ice cream ball is one inch in diameter.
The ice cream ball has two layers.
Under the layer of soft, juicy, melty ice cream is a ball of hard ice.
It is made with 80% fruit juice.
12 ice cream balls are in the pouch.
The manufacturer demonstrates how to eat the ice cream.
Not just by simply eating it, but also by putting it into a cup of soda or milk.
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- English (US)
Unnatural
The ice cream ball is one inch in diameter.
The ice cream ball has two layers.
Under the layer of soft, juicy, melty ice cream is a ball of hard ice.
It is made with 80% fruit juice.
12 ice cream balls are in the pouch.
The manufacturer demonstrates how to eat the ice cream.
Not just by simply eating it, but also by putting it into a cup of soda or milk.
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- Japanese
Wow, I made many mistakes.
Thank you for your kind help!
- Japanese
the inside is soft, the surface is hard ice.
Is this OK?
"Under the layer of soft, juicy, melty ice cream is a ball of hard ice."
- English (US)
Unnatural
"The icy ball has an ice cream center."
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- Japanese
I will use the sentence above.
Thanks again!
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