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24 Apr 2017

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Recently, more and more people are hotly debating on issue regarding education. One of the questions under debate is whether parents should give money to their children for their progress in school. Naturally, different people have different opinions. As for me, even though the question may be quite complex, I tend to support that using money to encourage children to study hard is a good choice, a choice that its merits weight out its drawbacks.

To start with, offering money to children is a wise way to acknowldge children’s efforts and facilitate their learning progress. As we all know, modern students are usually suffering great pressures from school. When children get high mark in school, they always desire encouragement and recognition from others, especcially from parents. Therefore, giving money as a reward is just a way to express parent’s satisfaction and will motivate children to persist in hard working. For example, when I was in high school, my mother always rewaded me with 10 RMB for a full mark. In order to get these money, I became more harder. By receiving these amount of money, I felt that all the efforts I had made were worthwhile and I was largely motivated to take more time to study. If my excellent class performance has not been rewarded these money from my mom, I must feel sad and learn knowledge without zeal. After all ,every child longs for encouragement. Obviously, money is an effective stimulus.

Moreover, school-age children should not only have enough knowledge, they should also have a strong practical skills. Receiving money from parents provides children with chances to cultive their fanancial management ability. And this ability could help kids spend their money better. Take my young brother as an example. He got No.1 in his class when he was 13 and receives 100RMB from his grandfather. But he didn’t waste these money on useless purchases, such as computer games, junk food and so on. He made a detailed note about these money: spending 30 RMB on necessary books , using 10 RMB to prepare a card for mother’s birthday and making 60 RMB into bank to get some interests. Now, the money in bank is not only 60 RMB. It is clearly that giving chilren money can help them expand their wealth and let them know how to invest their money.

However, too much money could have a counteractive effect on children’s learning . Because it may cause the young to form some kind of misconception of study. For example, some kids cheat in exam just for getting a good mark that can exchange lots of money from their parents. And they need these money buy some expensive goods and enjoy luxurious life. Therefore, parents should reward children with a proper amount of money----just a little money to drive them to keep forward, not too much to get them accustomed to high consumption. Proper rewarding brings more benefits than drawbacks.

To sum up, due to the above mentioned reasons, I think that it is good for parents offering proper money to their children as a reward for their progress.
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