16 Feb 2016
Native language
Japanese
Question about English (US)
I want you to correct the following essay.
"I disagree with the idea that people rescued in the mountains in Japan should pay the full cost of their rescue.l have two reasons as to why I feel this way.
Firstly, if we do so,the number of people who go to mountain will greatly decrease.
And economical benefits associated with tourism in mountainous regions will also decrease.
Secondly, mountain walking is beneficial for people's health.So it's worth using citizens' taxes to rescue. But I think people who rescued should pay part of the costs.
Therefore I don't believe this idea."
Please let me know if there are any grammatical mistakes in my essay:D
"I disagree with the idea that people rescued in the mountains in Japan should pay the full cost of their rescue.l have two reasons as to why I feel this way.
Firstly, if we do so,the number of people who go to mountain will greatly decrease.
And economical benefits associated with tourism in mountainous regions will also decrease.
Secondly, mountain walking is beneficial for people's health.So it's worth using citizens' taxes to rescue. But I think people who rescued should pay part of the costs.
Therefore I don't believe this idea."
Please let me know if there are any grammatical mistakes in my essay:D
Native language
English (US)
I disagree with the idea that people rescued in the mountains in Japan should pay the full cost of their rescue.
(You don't have to say "l have two reasons as to why I feel this way.")
Firstly, if we do so, the number of people who travel to mountains will greatly decrease and economical benefits associated with tourism in mountainous regions will also decrease.
Secondly, mountain climbing is beneficial for people's health. So it's worth using citizens' taxes to rescue. However I think people who are rescued should pay part of the costs.
(You also don't need to say "Therefore I don't believe in this idea")
(You don't have to say "l have two reasons as to why I feel this way.")
Firstly, if we do so, the number of people who travel to mountains will greatly decrease and economical benefits associated with tourism in mountainous regions will also decrease.
Secondly, mountain climbing is beneficial for people's health. So it's worth using citizens' taxes to rescue. However I think people who are rescued should pay part of the costs.
(You also don't need to say "Therefore I don't believe in this idea")
Native language
English (US)
I disagree with the idea that people rescued in the mountains in Japan should pay the full cost of their rescue.
(You don't have to say "l have two reasons as to why I feel this way.")
Firstly, if we do so, the number of people who travel to mountains will greatly decrease and economical benefits associated with tourism in mountainous regions will also decrease.
Secondly, mountain climbing is beneficial for people's health. So it's worth using citizens' taxes to rescue. However I think people who are rescued should pay part of the costs.
(You also don't need to say "Therefore I don't believe in this idea")
(You don't have to say "l have two reasons as to why I feel this way.")
Firstly, if we do so, the number of people who travel to mountains will greatly decrease and economical benefits associated with tourism in mountainous regions will also decrease.
Secondly, mountain climbing is beneficial for people's health. So it's worth using citizens' taxes to rescue. However I think people who are rescued should pay part of the costs.
(You also don't need to say "Therefore I don't believe in this idea")
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