10 Nov 2017

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Despite health warnings, a large number of people continue to smoke all over the world. Why should we be concerned about this?What solutions would you suggest?
As time goes by, smoking has become a highly controvertial issue. First of all, not only cause dangerous diseases to the smokers as well as not smokers, but also generate expenses to the whole society. Despite of this, many people continue smoking.
Generally smokers start smoking at an early age. Teenagers are vulnerables and they feel influencied by their peers and the mass media. It is only a matter of time before they become addicted to the nicotine and as a result, quitting smoking is so difficult.
For that reason, is crucial that the goverment set policies that contribute to the declining of smoking. They can increase the taxes of cigarettes in order to disminish its consume. Furthermore, it should campaining about the side effects of smoking, especially in teenagers. These measures will be more efficient and less expensive to the health system.
Similarly parents should be aware of setting an example to their children than yearn to be like them. If the parents smoke they will not have the morality to demand their children that they do not do it that.
In conclusion, I would say there is not doubt of the damages caused by smoking and the society must change the perception of smoking in order to achieve a better health for all of us. The resources that goverment allocate to heal illness caused by smoking, could be used in better purposes that benefict the comunity.

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