11 Jul 2018
Native language
Korean
Question about English (US)
Can you correct my sentence??
On Mt. Hwangbyeong in Daegwallyeong area, as the number of mountain animals come down the village for prey, local residents gather to hunt them for village ancestor worship.
"This time, we've got a big wild boar !"
"I guess this year is lucky"
"I can't wait to go to village and show what we've got"
"Let's go"
As they return to the village, people in the village cheered very loudly in delight.
On Mt. Hwangbyeong in Daegwallyeong area, as the number of mountain animals come down the village for prey, local residents gather to hunt them for village ancestor worship.
"This time, we've got a big wild boar !"
"I guess this year is lucky"
"I can't wait to go to village and show what we've got"
"Let's go"
As they return to the village, people in the village cheered very loudly in delight.
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I would rephrase it to be:
“On Mt. Hwangbyeong in Daegwallyeong area, many mountain animals come down toward the village to hunt for their prey. Local residents gather around to hunt them for the village ancestor worship.
"This time, we've got a big wild boar !"
"I guess this year is lucky"
"I can't wait to go to the village and show what we've got"
"Let's go"
As they return, everyone in the village cheered very loudly in delight.
Sounds very good just a few small mistakes. Good start !
:)))
“On Mt. Hwangbyeong in Daegwallyeong area, many mountain animals come down toward the village to hunt for their prey. Local residents gather around to hunt them for the village ancestor worship.
"This time, we've got a big wild boar !"
"I guess this year is lucky"
"I can't wait to go to the village and show what we've got"
"Let's go"
As they return, everyone in the village cheered very loudly in delight.
Sounds very good just a few small mistakes. Good start !
:)))
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