Can you fix my sentence so it sounds more natural? (I want to write in my diary.)

I cleaned my room over half a day.
I refreshing because things decreased on my desk.
I want to keep this state.

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Sahiil

28 June

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Sorry, didn't you already ask this? :)

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yuki_0228182020

28 June

Japanese

@sahilsignup Thank you for your earlier response.
Yes, the content is the same as before.
I made this sentence all by myself from scratch, and the sentence I just wrote was made while doing some research.
I wanted to know how well I am writing now, and I wanted to ask you to correct me if this sentence still makes sense.

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Sahiil

28 June

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@yuki_0228182020 I'm sorry for failing to notice the edits! Great job with the research!

"I cleaned my room throughout half of the day."
or
"I cleaned my room for half of the day."
or
"Over half of the day, I cleaned my room." (but this sounds a bit less natural :)).

"It's refreshing seeing the decreased amount of items on my desk."
or
"I feel refreshed now that there are fewer items on my desk."
or
"I feel refreshed now that thee is a decreased number of items on my desk."

"I want to keep my desk clean."
or
"I want to keep my desk in this state."
or
"I want to keep my desk in this clean state."

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yuki_0228182020

28 June

Japanese

@sahilsignup No 💦 sorry for the confusion 💦.

Thanks again for the multiple answers! They are very helpful ✨
I'm not very good at English, and I haven't studied it very long, so I tend to use textbook expressions and awkward expressions 😓

So it's really helpful to know how many patterns you can show me!

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