間違い文法を直していただけませんか。
これは文法の練習だけです。意味が全然重要ではありません。
毎日、皆たちは色々な思い出を失ってしまったので、それはいい事だと思っています。
生活の中で、面白くて悲しくてことが起こります。
何も、誰も、価値があったら、大切にしたいです。
力が過きると、疲れたになります。
涙が降ったら、優しい他人や愛する人を忘れないで。
痛くなったら、お大事になさってください。
面白い想像が出てきてますが、奇妙な出来事を現れます。
後悔はゴミ屋敷ようにどんどん重なります。仕方がありません。
色々なお手伝いには感謝していて、優しい人になりたいです。
私は可愛くはありませんが、悲しくても、心の美しいが人になりたいです。
私は強くも賢くもはありませんが、全ての下手でも、頑張りたいです。
怒ろことはへらへらし、争うしなくて議論しません。
人生は簡単にはありませんが、平和が私の望みです。
たとえゆっくりであっても、きっと少なくとも1%が進むでしょう。
過去には戻れませんが、今を楽しみたいです。

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Pinkypanky · Answer

毎日人は記憶を失っていくけど、それは悪いことではないと思う
人生には面白いことや、悲しいことが起こる
人でもものでも、価値があるものは大切にしたい
頑張りすぎると、疲れる
涙がこぼれたら、自分自身を大切に
面白い想像が出てくるが、奇妙な出来事がおこる
後悔はゴミのようにつもる、それは仕方がない
いままで受けた様々な助けには感謝しているから、私は優しい人になりたい
私は可愛くはないけど、悲しいときにさえも美しい心を持つ人になりたい
私は強くも賢くもないけど、何も上手にできなくてもベストを尽くしたい
怒りは愚かだ、争うな
人生は簡単ではない、でも穏やかだと良いと思う
たとえゆっくりであっても、少なくとも1%は進歩しているはずだ
過去には戻れない、だから私は今を楽しみたい

nomadatlatl · Answer

@ateol 
毎日、誰もが色々な思い出を失ってしまっても、それはそれでいい事だと思っています。
日々の暮しの中で、面白いことや悲しいことが起こります。
どんなものにも、誰にでも、存在意義があるのだから、大切にしたいです。
力が入り過ぎると、疲れてしまいます。
涙がこぼれたら、優しい他人や愛する人を忘れないで。
調子が優れないときは、お大事になさってください。
面白いことを想像してしまいますが、それは奇妙な出来事として現れます。
後悔はゴミ屋敷のようにどんどん重なります。仕方がありません。
色々手助けを受けて感謝しているし、優しい人になりたいです。
私は可愛くはありませんが、それでも心の美しい人になりたいです。
私は強くも賢くもありませんし、なんの取り柄もないですが、頑張りたいです。
怒りはさらりと受け流し、争うことも議論もしません。
人生は簡単ではありませんが、心の平穏が私の望みです。
たとえゆっくりであっても、たとえ1%であっても、きっと前進できるでしょう。
過去には戻れませんが、今を楽しみたいです。

I know you only focus on grammar practice, but it's not easy to correct grammatical mistakes without taking the contents into account. Please understand it.

nomadatlatl · Answer

@ateol No, my great pleasure to be of help.

それはそれでいい事だと思っています。
➡️それはそれで is not redundant?
➡ Not always, I suppose. "それはそれでいい事だ" is that is for the best (this phrase was already discussed, as you know). Some people  think "それはそれでいい事だ" is wordy, some don't, me included in this case. Maybe a matter of preference?🤔

私は強くも賢くもありません*し、なんの取り柄もないですが、頑張りたいです。
➡️ I understand why you changed some of these particles from が to し。It's because the middle part is not conflicting, so が doesn't make sense. Am I right? 
➡ You got a point. But I just changed "が" into "し" because "私は強くも賢くもありません*が、なんの取り柄もないですが" sounds akaward. If you say "I'm not strong and smart, *but in addition not good at anything, but〜" in English, it sounds weird, right? So "I'm not strong and smart, *and in addition not good at anything, but〜" would flow better, right?

Apart from this issue, particle "が" is not easy to use properly. It generally refers to the contradictory context, but "が" in Japanese is often used in another context. It's hard to explain these usages so you can understand easily.
Please see links;
https://yoridokoro.biz/blog/writing-ability/grammar/words/postposition/joshi_gyakusetu/

http://officeichico.blog.jp/archives/40642077.html

As you can see from them, "が" sometimes refers to the resultative context. Hope you didn't get confused.😅

• 調子が優れないときは、お大事になさってください。
➡️This is ときは (time), and I think I understand. It's because たら is after the fact, and ときは is when, so it makes more sense here. Am I right? 
➡ Hmm, generally speaking, "たら" and "ときは" don't seem to make a huge difference, but "調子が優れないなら" doesn't ring a bell with "お大事になさってください" to me. I don't know why. This is my personal impression.

"お大事になさってください" sounds very formal and polite, so it doesn't seem to go well with "痛くなったら" that doesn't sound formal and polite. That's why I changed it into "調子が優れないときは."

たとえゆっくりであっても、たとえ1%であっても、きっと前進できるでしょう。
➡️ Is this たとえ not redundant? 
Is this natural?
たとえゆっくりであっても、少なくとも1%は前進できるでしょう。
➡ Yes, some people may feel it the way you say.
"たとえゆっくりであっても、少なくとも1%は前進できるでしょう" makes sense. I use double "たとえ" just because I want to emphasize your enthusiasm for progress.

Did I explain well? Let me know if you have troubles.

nomadatlatl · Answer

@ateol 
【redundancy】
Whether it feels redundant or not depends on the context, how it feels differs among people, though. If it's obviously redundant, most people will avoid the repetition. If not, I mean, in a borderline case, maybe judgement depends on preference. 
You're confused. I can feel you because I'm not a native English speaker. When in doubt, don't hesitate to ask for a second opinion, probably a third opinion and more. It doesn't hurt to ask.

【asking more and more】
Don't ask less. Don't hesitate.
It's good to follow native speakers' suggestions, but it's not all when learning foreign languages. More you learn, more questions you're sure to have. That's natural. Don't you want to solve these questions? I do want to!! As you know, I tend to bombard you with questions. I can't hold down my intellectual curiosity popping up.
Ok, feel free to ask me anything about Japanese when in doubt. I was born and raised in Japan. I'm a native Japanese speaker.
Hey, come on!!
Ask, and it will be given to you. 
Seek, and you will find．
Knock, and the door of your language journey will be opened to you．

Good luck!!👍✌️

nomadatlatl · Answer

@ateol 
【たら】
Yes, たら is a conditional. But there seem to be other usages. 
For your info, see the links.

https://langoal.com/jlpt/explain-grammar-tara.html

https://yousei.arc-academy.net/manbow/index.php/term/detail/769#:~:text=%E2%97%8B%E6%98%A8%E6%97%A5%E3%80%81%E3%83%87%E3%83%91%E3%83%BC%E3%83%88%E3%81%B8%E8%A1%8C%E3%81%A3,%E3%81%9F%E3%82%89%E3%80%81%E6%9C%8D%E3%82%92%E8%B2%B7%E3%81%A3%E3%81%9F%E3%80%82&text=%EF%BC%881%EF%BC%89%E3%80%8C%E3%82%82%E3%81%97%E3%80%81%E4%BB%AE%E3%81%AB,%E3%82%BF%E3%82%AF%E3%82%B7%E3%83%BC%E3%81%A7%E8%A1%8C%E3%81%8D%E3%81%BE%E3%81%97%E3%82%87%E3%81%86%E3%80%82

https://www.tomojuku.com/blog/to-ba-tara-nara/tara/

Frankly, I didn't pay much attention to how たら was actually used, because we natives can naturally use it. But I'm puzzled by the complicated explanation in the links.😵 
As for たら, can you please give me the sentences you're not sure about?

"たら" may sound colloquial but I don't think it should not be used in writing. 
For example,
あの時新製品が爆発的に売れなかったら、我が社は今頃どうなっていただろう。I wonder what would have happened if our new product didn't sell like hot cakes at that time.
This sentence sounds natural in Japanese.

【〜してしまう】
Yes, I did it.
#1 力が入り過ぎると、疲れて*しまいます。
#2 面白いことを想像して*しまいますが、それは奇妙な出来事として現れます。
#1 seems to be close to the phrase "bring to a close." On the other hand, #2 refers to acting unconsciously or spontaneously. To be honest, however, I think we are not so aware of that difference. 
I checked the usage of "〜してしまう" online and found this issue was also complicated or tricky. Japanese language is really hard to understand.🥵

https://www.tomojuku.com/blog/teshimau/

https://www.edewakaru.com/archives/16372216.html

https://www.edewakaru.com/archives/24140910.html

These links classifies "〜してしまう" into the two types, "完了"(completion) and "後悔・残念"(regret, disappointment). That being said, there seem to be mixed feelings. I don't think it's wise to conclude every "〜してしまう" sentence has only one nuance, completion or regret. Such a categorical decision can be risky.

Notice/ I can't help but watch you get eatened. 
あなたが食べるのを見てしまう ☓➡ あなたが食べ*られるのを見てしまう ○🤯

【それでも】
I think so, whether or not it sounds better depends on a matter of sense, though.

Well, your questions are really good but very tough to answer.🤢 I didn't analyze Japanese the way you did. Probably that's because I'm a native speaker and you're not. I hope I explained well but don't hesitate to ask me if you have something you'd like to make sure of.

nomadatlatl · Answer

@ateol Sorry for my poor explanation. Telling exactly about slight differences in nuance is not easy. It takes time to understand 100%. That's the same with me. I have a lot on my plate that I haven't been sure about. 🤫😓

As for たら in writing, I don't know why that person said it shouldn't be used in writing.🤷

I don't know if あなたが食べるのを見てしまう has a negative connotation. That depends on the context.

面白いことを想像して*しまいますが means I inevitably (or unconsciously, spontaneously, for some reason etc) imagine something funny rather than has a negative or positive connotation. Whether or not it has a negative or positive nuance depends on the context, I suppose.

Could I explain better?🤞 You can ask me anytime if you're not sure.✌️🙆 Don't hesitate!

nomadatlatl · Answer

@ateol Ahh, I get the picture. 
"だったら" sounds casual. "だとしたら" sounds formal. When you write an academic essay, I think you should use "だとしたら." For example, 温暖化がこの異常気象の原因だとしたら〜 (Supposed global warming causes this extreme weather, . . .)

In casual writing, I think you can use "だったら." For example, "あなたの立場だったら、ぼくも同じことをしただろう." (I would also have done the same thing if I had been in your position)

Am I making sense?

nomadatlatl · Answer

@ateol 
【としたら、とすれば】
Hmm . . . Maybe you could say that but I'm not confident you're right. I didn't mull over this issue because I'm a native speaker. These links below say a lot, but quite confusing to me, as much as I can judge whether specific sentences sound natural or not.

https://chiyo-sampo.net/grammar-jlptn2-toshitara-tosureba-tosuruto-tonartara-tonreba-tonaruto/

https://tanosuke.com/toshitara-2/

http://nihongo-online.jp/net/index.php?action=bbs_view_mobile_post_main&block_id=81&bbs_id=13&post_id=1467&nonc_session=moius7eca85v9896o8m0cd8e9gfclm9c

As a conjunction, としたら seems to be more casual than とすれば. Sometimes I see とすれば in academic writing, while I don't remember seeing としたら in that situation. 
For example, 彼の行為は正当防衛として違法性が阻却されるはずだ。とすれば暴行罪には該当しないことになる。
In the academic context like this, としたら couldn't seem to take the place of とすれば. It would sound a bit awkward. Anyway this is my personal impression.

nomadatlatl · Answer

@ateol What I mean is I use "とすれば" but don't use "としたら" as a conjunction (接続詞) in academic writing. 
彼の行為は正当防衛として違法性が阻却されるはずだ。とすれば暴行罪には該当しないことになる。→ This is an academic sentence. I wouldn't use としたら instead.

In other writing, I use both.
車なら30分で行けるね。とすれば(としたら)、午後はゆっくりと過ごせるよ。→This is a non-academic sentence.

Maybe this is my preference.

Am I being clear? Feel free to ask anytime you're in doubt.

nomadatlatl · Answer

@ateol また疑問が出てきたらいつでもどうぞ。遠慮はいりません。🙆💪