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请问这样写对吗？
我选的吟诵诗是唐代诗人白居易的《夜雪》。这是一首咏雪诗，诗人运用侧面烘托手法，通过触觉、视觉、感觉、听觉的角度来描写《夜雪》，透露出孤独心情。视频上不仅可以听到我本人的诵读，并看到用楷书书法写的《夜雪》诗词，和我本人用画描绘了在寒冷寂静的深夜中，诗人看见窗外积雪。传来的积雪压折竹枝的声音，可知雪势有增无减。
请问这样写对吗？
我选的吟诵诗是唐代诗人白居易的《夜雪》。这是一首咏雪诗，诗人运用侧面烘托手法，通过触觉、视觉、感觉、听觉的角度来描写《夜雪》，透露出孤独心情。视频上不仅可以听到我本人的诵读，并看到用楷书书法写的《夜雪》诗词，和我本人用画描绘了在寒冷寂静的深夜中，诗人看见窗外积雪。传来的积雪压折竹枝的声音，可知雪势有增无减。
我选的吟诵诗是唐代诗人白居易的《夜雪》。这是一首咏雪诗，诗人运用侧面烘托手法，通过触觉、视觉、感觉、听觉的角度来描写《夜雪》，透露出孤独心情。视频上不仅可以听到我本人的诵读，并看到用楷书书法写的《夜雪》诗词，和我本人用画描绘了在寒冷寂静的深夜中，诗人看见窗外积雪。传来的积雪压折竹枝的声音，可知雪势有增无减。
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我觉得你写的挺对的，但是这首诗本身我不知道。anyway, your Chinese is good
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1.“通过触觉、视觉、*感觉*、听觉的角度”这个*感觉*包括了所有类型的知觉，不可以用在这里。
2.“透露出孤独*的*心情。”这里的孤独用来修饰心情大多会加个*的*。
3.“视频*上*”改成*里*或者*中*。
4.“并*看到用楷书”改成“并*且可以*看到”。
5.去掉“《夜雪》诗词*，*和我本人用”中间的逗号。
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