I wrote a short essay. I would be happy if you correct my essay:->

I don't want to change anything. When we want to replace something about ourselves, the desire would be caused by the comparison with others, the envy of others, or the hope of taking our faults away. However, I believe that our characteristics, as they are, can't be copied, and there is no alternative to ours around the world. Therefore, we should take pride in that and consider our characteristics precious and invaluable. Moreover, because of having faults and sometimes committing mistakes, people have pulled together in many aspects and constructed a well-designed society. So, the intention of removing our shortcomings will urge us to make the opposite trend. That means, no one has a defect, and everyone will be likely to manage by themselves. In that way, we would finally confront the problems of declining the will of cooperation.

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27 January

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@tujingyi80

Hopefully this could help you. :)

I don't want to change anything. When we want to replace something in ourselves, this desire is triggered by comparisons with others, envy of others or the desire to take away our flaws. However, I believe in our characteristics because they cannot be replicated and there is no substitute for us in the world. Therefore, we should be proud of them and consider our characteristics as valuable and priceless. In addition, because there are flaws and sometimes mistakes are made, people unite in many ways to build a well-designated society. Therefore, the intention to eliminate our flaws will drive us to make the opposite trend. This means that no one has flaws and everyone will have the possibility to manage themselves. In this way, we will end up facing the problem of a decreasing willingness to cooperate.

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