are these sentences natural?

This is a streetcar in which you can dine while running around the city and enjoying the passing scenery of it. this accommodates up to 50 passengers and serves a variety of dishes and beverages of the seasons. It will offer you extraordinary experiences.

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are these sentences natural?

This is a streetcar in which you can dine while running around the city and enjoying the passing scenery of it. this accommodates up to 50 passengers and serves a variety of dishes and beverages of the seasons. It will offer you extraordinary experiences.

20thCenturyMan · Accepted Answer

@michi_t Sure!

As its name suggests, “Train Rouge” has a beautiful red exterior, and its interior decor is based on a chic black theme. It is, as it were, a “rolling party room.”
 The panoramic train windows and high tables enable you to comfortably enjoy the scenery.

I hope it has booze 🍻🤣

20thCenturyMan · Answer

This is a streetcar you can dine in while riding around the city and enjoying the passing scenery. It can accommodate up to 50 passengers and serves a variety of seasonal dishes and beverages. It will offer you an extraordinary experience.

Where is this, BTW? 😁 Sounds like fun.

Where is this, BTW? 😁 Sounds like fun.

20thCenturyMan · Answer

@michi_t Cool! What a great idea. 👍

20thCenturyMan · Answer

@michi_t yes "rolling" is used exactly this way. We sometimes say "party on wheels" if it's a bus or something. If it's a boat, it's a "booze cruise." This is super informal, of course.

Wow, I think i will make some friends in Hiroshima next time I'm in Japan 😎🍻

Bernard_E · Answer

The only thing I would change about this answer is using the word "riding."  While it's technically accurate, you might be losing some intended nuance, and English is a great language for being precise.  So if you said "running around" meaning it was done especially quickly, you could use a word like "zipping around" or  "zooming around." There is no word I know of to specifically describe moving by train, like there is to "sail" in a boat, or "fly" in a plane, so using the generic word "ride" doesn't add any marketing color to the piece.  If by "running around the city" you meant to imply length or completeness of the trip, you could say "while touring the city." (which is enough, as "touring" implies that you will see a fair representation of the city and its scenery, but be careful because, especially when expressed as "taking a tour,"  it also implies it's being guided, either by a person or at least the help of a map or guidebook, so be sure you are not misrepresenting,  if there is no one on the streetcar explaining what they're seeing.). If that's not the case, you could say "as you travel throughout the city and enjoy the passing scenery." (Travel implies significant time and distance to reach a destination, i.e., you wouldn't say "I travelled across the street" but would say "I travelled all the way across town" or "I travelled back East for the holiday."  "I travelled all month" still implies being far from home.) but riding simply refers to being conveyed by something as a passenger, usually as an alternative, e.g.  Instead of walking, I got to ride a streetcar across town; I used to ride in with him to work, but now instead of driving his car, he rides the train every morning, so therefore I have to take the train too, unless I want to take my own car to work.  While I was riding my bike there, he rode (or got to ride, implying luck or privilege) in an air-conditioned taxi.  I unfortunately can't afford to take a taxi for that long of a ride.  And ride sometimes doesn't even refer to horizontal movement: He rode the elevator instead of taking the stairs.  Why climb stairs when you can take an elevator?  He planned to ride all the rides at the amusement park.

Bernard_E · Answer

As its name would suggest, "Train Rouge" boasts a beautiful red exterior, while its interior features a chic black decor.  Think of it as a "dinner party on rails!" The train's high tables and panoramic windows let you take in the scenery of the city in total comfort.  (Marketing writing needs to use active verbs to be most effective, rather than passive verbs like "is" or "has." "Rolling" isn't incorrect, but "on rails" conveys more of a sense of place of specifically being on a moving train.  A "rolling party" infers loud, festive, stand-up drinking and dancing kind of party and sometimes refers to a party that moves from house to house in stages, while a "dinner party on rails" connotes something more subdued, formal, where everyone is seated, yet gliding quickly and smoothly along.  "Taking in the scenery" implies getting a nice broad view of it, that there will be a lot of it, yet you won't miss anything, which is the benefit you mean to sell by the big windows and high tables, versus just enjoying it, which presumably you could also do from lower tables, with average-sized windows, and even without moving.

Bernard_E · Answer

@michi_t sorry it came across as difficult, but take comfort that it was  an answer that could have just as easily been given to a native speaker who was new to writing advertising copy.

This is a streetcar you can dine in while riding around the city and enjoying the passing scenery. It can accommodate up to 50 passengers and serves a variety of seasonal dishes and beverages. It will offer you an extraordinary experience. Where is this, BTW? 😁 Sounds like fun.

@michi_t Cool! What a great idea. 👍

@michi_t yes "rolling" is used exactly this way. We sometimes say "party on wheels" if it's a bus or something. If it's a boat, it's a "booze cruise." This is super informal, of course.Wow, I think i will make some friends in Hiroshima next time I'm in Japan 😎🍻

@michi_t sorry it came across as difficult, but take comfort that it was an answer that could have just as easily been given to a native speaker who was new to writing advertising copy.

This is a streetcar you can dine in while riding around the city and enjoying the passing scenery. It can accommodate up to 50 passengers and serves a variety of seasonal dishes and beverages. It will offer you an extraordinary experience.

Where is this, BTW? 😁 Sounds like fun.

@michi_t yes "rolling" is used exactly this way. We sometimes say "party on wheels" if it's a bus or something. If it's a boat, it's a "booze cruise." This is super informal, of course.

Wow, I think i will make some friends in Hiroshima next time I'm in Japan 😎🍻