Hi, would this sound natural :

Alice is a morning person so her brain is most alert in the morning and she is really good at harnessing this energy and focus to get tasks, work and chores done. She usually drinks a cup of coffee before taking the kids to school but these days she'd rather drink milk instead. She works in a bakery, she loves her job. There is a man that's keen on her products but she doesn't want to work with him. In the afternoon she goes out with her bestfriend. She introduced her to her grandma and since then they have to go to visit her every day. At night she prepares a delicious dinner for the kids, that's how her day ends.

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Hi, would this sound natural :

Alice is a morning person so her brain is most alert in the morning and she is really good at harnessing this energy and focus to get tasks, work and chores done. She usually drinks a cup of coffee before taking the kids to school but these days she'd rather drink milk instead. She works in a bakery, she loves her job. There is a man that's keen on her products but she doesn't want to work with him. In the afternoon she goes out with her bestfriend. She introduced her to her grandma and since then they have to go to visit her every day. At night she prepares a delicious dinner for the kids, that's how her day ends.

eyecy · Answer

I've made some corrections:

"Alice is a morning person, so her brain is most alert in the morning; she is really good at harnessing this energy and focus to get tasks, work and chores done. She usually drinks a cup of coffee before taking the kids to school, but these days she'd rather drink milk instead. She works in a bakery and loves her job. There is a man that's keen on her products, but she doesn't want to work with him. In the afternoon she goes out with her best friend. She introduced her to her grandma and since then they have to go to visit her every day. At night she prepares a delicious dinner for the kids- that's how her day ends."

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