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15 May 2017
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After that we went to the sea to take a bath. We had fun a lot. At 5:00 pm we decided to return, but first we stayed in the beach seeing the sunset. Then, we started our trip to home. While my father's friend was driving, the truck skidded to a halt and fell into a ditch. It was horrible because I saw how everything around us was spinning. Fortunately, there was not damage in the car, but my mother's friend hit her head in a part of the car. She spat blood and did not remember the accident, so asked us to tell her what happened over and over again because she inmediately forgot what we said. Does this sound natural?
After that we went to the sea to take a bath. We had fun a lot. At 5:00 pm we decided to return, but first we stayed in the beach seeing the sunset. Then, we started our trip to home. While my father's friend was driving, the truck skidded to a halt and fell into a ditch. It was horrible because I saw how everything around us was spinning. Fortunately, there was not damage in the car, but my mother's friend hit her head in a part of the car. She spat blood and did not remember the accident, so asked us to tell her what happened over and over again because she inmediately forgot what we said. Does this sound natural?
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A little unnatural
After that we went into the sea to take a bath. We had a lot of fun. At 5:00 pm we decided to return, but first we stayed on the beach seeing the sunset. Then, we started our trip home. While my father's friend was driving, the truck skidded to a halt and fell into a ditch. It was horrible because I saw how everything around us was spinning. Fortunately, there was not too much damage in the interior of the car, but my mother's friend hit her head on a part of the car. She bled and did not remember the accident, so she asked us to tell her what happened over and over again because she would immediately forget everything after we explain to her what happened.
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- English (US)
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- Traditional Chinese (Hong Kong)
A little unnatural
After that we went into the sea to take a bath. We had a lot of fun. At 5:00 pm we decided to return, but first we stayed on the beach seeing the sunset. Then, we started our trip home. While my father's friend was driving, the truck skidded to a halt and fell into a ditch. It was horrible because I saw how everything around us was spinning. Fortunately, there was not too much damage in the interior of the car, but my mother's friend hit her head on a part of the car. She bled and did not remember the accident, so she asked us to tell her what happened over and over again because she would immediately forget everything after we explain to her what happened.
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A little unnatural
After that we went to the sea to take a bath. We had a lot of fun. At 5:00 we decided to return but first we stayed at the beach to see the sunset. Then we started our trip home. While my friend's father was driving the truck skidded to a halt and fell into a ditch. It was horrible because I saw everything around us spinning.
Fortunately there was no damage to the car but my mothers friend hit her head on a part of the car. She was spitting blood and did not remember the accident. She kept asking us to tell her what happened over and over again because she would immediately forget what we said.
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