Correct please

‪I feel my emotion,
sometimes negative one,
that’s scary.
the emotion is trying to cover myself.

but I feel them.
because everything is mine.‬

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AdmiralMia

15 Mar 2018

English (US)

This is what I understand from your poem and how I would say it:

"I feel emotions
Sometimes they are negative
And that scares me
These negative emotions try to smother me
But I keep them at bay
Because they all belong to me"

Let me know if I misunderstood anything.

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chii1210

16 Mar 2018

Japanese

@Ameru thank you

This is not a poem
for me

Anyway
this part is difficult.

These negative emotions try to smother me
But I keep them at bay

Cover is not good?
I mean like
the scary emotion make myself lost.

And at bay is weird for me
It’s a exsample right?

I mean I just feel the emotion not denying them.

AdmiralMia

16 Mar 2018

English (US)

@chii1210 Ok, I understand now. You are right, "cover" will make sense in that situation if you mean that you just feel these emotions. I assumed you meant that you were fighting these emotions. I used "at bay" because it means that the emotions are there, but you still have other emotions, too. Sorry for the late response.

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chii1210

17 Mar 2018

Japanese

@Ameru thank you as though you are busy

And sorry my English is bad
Thank you for your assume

About “cover”
I just feel negative emotion,
but I don’t want to be covered by them
because they make myself lost.
I think by not fighting them,I will escape that.
does it make sense?
and in this situation
cover is okay?
I just wanna check it again

And about “at bay”
I looked it up
and my dictionary says
it means as if
I were at scary place where I fall down
from the bay.
I feel that’s weird again
So I’m confused

AdmiralMia

18 Mar 2018

English (US)

@chii1210 I think "overcome" would fit better than "covered" in this situation. And I don't understand the last part where you say you will escape that feeling if you don't fight it? This may not be what you meant, but I would say it like this:
"I just feel negative emotion,
but I don’t want to be overcome by them
because they make me feel lost.
I think by fighting these feelings, I will escape that."

When I say "at bay" it means to keep something away so it doesn't get close to you. There are different definitions fr "at bay". Hope that answered your question :)

Also, don't worry about your english. It's actually pretty good. You are better at english than I am at japanese, haha.

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chii1210

18 Mar 2018

Japanese

@Ameru okay
thank you so much

I perhaps wanted to mean
I think by not fighting these feelings,
I will escape that.

This part is difficult to share even in Japanese because this is a problem of how to think about emotion.not a problem of English.
So,it’s okay:)
And about “at bay”
I could say the same thing.
I guess that
what I think is opposite to your understanding.
Sorry I can’t explain well

Anyway
You learn japanese?
Then,We will do our best about learning!